If I were editing this...I would add some depth! Use perspective (prob 1 point). Throw a vanishing point in there and have the text conform to this as if they were walls of a cavern. I'de put the vanishing point wherever you want attention drawn, as the eye will naturally gravitate towards this point. I would also throw the text behind the blue-ish figure.
Sorry if this has already been suggested, as I didn't read all the posts...
Sorry, Let me try to rephrase.
What I was trying to say is: make it look more three dimensional.
For instance, have the lower text even taller on the lefthand side. Have the right hand side of the same text box even shorter. Then adjust the overall horizontal size to much smaller. You already do this, I'm just saying make it more dramatic.
Check out this photo: [link]
Imagine your text is written on the buildings walls.
Im not sure if it was intentioned to make it look like the text adds to the perspective.
I dont think it would be looking better. Plus even If I wanted to follow your instructions I dont have access to the .ufo editable files now. My bad ^^